thats a cool poem

I think this poem is very good at showing your feelings but i think Mario's right that line could have been changed slightly to make the poem sound better. I find it helps sometimes to read out the poem aloud nd really listen to it, other than that the rest of the poem flows quite well! xxxx

The poem was really nice, i liked how you kept repeating the words "i'm still the girl" like you were pounding into his skull, repeatision is the best solution in most cases. I enjoyed the poem and i really liked it.

Just so you know a chicadie is a little baby chicken. I enjoy your poems, perhaps i will look at more of them. Your poems seem to be a spur of the moment and seem to have a lot of emotion put into them...two things i admire.

Great Job
Five>>>>>>

I agree with Dora - your still that girl that writes amazing heartfelt poetry with great expression - ah my darling I always love having the pleasure of reading one of your poems...
Hmm I have to disagree with Mario because that line makes sense and fits perfectly into the flow and theme of your piece - well done my friend on another fab write!
Luv Eirisa

Aww!! That was a gorgeous poem! I loved and enjoyed every line Your such an amazing writer and i hope you conitue and wish you the best of luck!
Much Love
~Chelsey~

i love it and i hope one day i will be still be the same girl to my friend....... great poem mate......keep writing....
i loved it
rite then talk later mate
cheerio

gr8 poem. really amazing. so sweeeeeeeeeeeet!!!!!!!!!! . read mine 2 and comment.