Reflection

by Traci   Nov 11, 2004


I see a girl
She looks so lonesome,
She looks so scared
I crack a laugh
to lighten her load
It doesn't help,
She starts to cry
Her heart starts to bleed
She needs help
She is in deep
I feel tears run
down my face
I must be feeling for this girl
I look again just to see
the girl is a reflection of me

( i need some help with this poem please comment and help)

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  • 19 years ago

    by Mezmeryz

    Traci...thanx for your comment, our poems are sort of similiar but i have written mine solely from my mind. ure poem is good i dont really think you need help with it...its good...5/5!:)

  • 20 years ago

    by UM

    No need for help here...awesome poem.

  • 20 years ago

    by Johnny Marlin 2

    I agree, I really enjoyed this poem, the only thing, I can say is that it didn't flow as nicely as most of yours... Still an excellent poem... Good Job

  • 20 years ago

    by Laura

    are you kidding me, why do you need help? i love this one! thats really good. if i were you i wouldnt change a thing!

  • 20 years ago

    by Mustardhart

    Love the way you target your audience attention to the first person only to make them know at the end it is one and same person from the start. Simple but beautiful. It is alright by me, a sure way to express ones self.
    Keep writing sweetie!!

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