aww that was realy sweet .. i know how u feel it was good .. great job.

Excellent poem. I like it. Keep on writing... I think your better then you may think.

jason

p.s. check mine out if you get a chance... i like to be critiqued, so no matter how brutal, tell me what you feel...

man i cryed really u know what i have my best friend he name is vicky we have been freinds for 5 years and she got a new boy friend and i really think she is going to for get about me i cant be mad only sad

Wow, good poem. I can really relate to it. Thanks for ur comments, and keep writin
Loadsa luv, ShEll xxx

You implemented the same rhyme scheme throughout the piece, giving ur poem a nice rhythm. I am in a similar position so i could totally relate to it. Great job!!!

Wow. This was an excellent poem. I know exactly how you feel. Check out some of my stuff if u have time
x ShEll x

this is a great poem and i understand it so well because i went through the exact thing last week where i had spent almost every day with this guy and basically lost all of my friends because my life had evolved around him and he cheated on me one night when we had an argument and his cousin told me becuase he didnt have balls enogh to tell me. it hurt so bad it felt like i had wasted 9 months of my life for nothing. its a horrible feeling. i quite eating cuz i lost my appetite and i couldnt sleep cuz i kept draeming of him and a girl and kept thinkin of all the things he had done to me. we were so happy when we first started going out but when you start arguing alot and you are sad becuz things arent how they use to be and you try to talk to them and they dont understand you better just starty counting down days cuz the ride is almost over.
its a great thing you said.

i like you poem very good check out mine when you get a chance

Thank you all so much for commenting. It means a lot to me, and i'll try to look at some of your stuff. Thanks!

-Ann

Hey great poem....really chill rushing...i can relate to it to...keep writin..

hey this is a really really good poem i like it alot, if you like poetry like this one you might like some of mine. but ya this poem is really good

I loved this poem, I feel you here girl!

Yours,
Fatimah