Inside my heart

by Kara !   Nov 13, 2004


Your sentiment's not welcome
because this is my lonely box.
A room of gold has faded
the walls dampen, peel, rot.
The cracks are getting larger
and the floors are creaking,
shrinking in these cold days.
But I know my room of neglect.

It used to look so different,
when I used to share this room with you.
It was beautiful, it was warm,
it was everything we dreamt of.
It was just for us. To share together.
But then one day you left - well,
you never really did. Because the ghost
yes, the ghost of you, resides in my lonely space.

The photographs of our love
rest upon the fireplace. The place
"where the flame will never go out",
extinguished by a few tears I shed.
And it seems it's made the room colder
and the break in the middle doesn't help
and the ghost of you, just waits around
watching this room fall apart.

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  • 18 years ago

    by N J Thornton

    I've read worse teen love poems I 'll say that. I liked the first stanza, not bad for the subject at all.
    I think the flow is lacking slightly in the second and third stanzas. I'm confused whether the "ghost" is metaphorical or literal, either way it seemed a bit of a cliche way to talk about the past memories. On the subject of cliche the "flame" is cliche too, put me off the final stanza.
    Overall, it started well but the ending could have been better.

  • 18 years ago

    by //Vianna\\

    This is a very sweet poem, and very sad too. good work.

  • 18 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    Absolutely amazing, was so lovely and full of emotion, could really relate, well done

  • 19 years ago

    by Elise

    Awesome poem !!!!!!!!!!! keep writing ! you have talent !! Take care,
    E.

  • 19 years ago

    by StarGirl

    :) Great poem