OMG!!!! this poem was amazing!!!!!!!! I was completely utterly shocked to see it was rated 3.5 because it deserves a 10!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! it was sooo amazing!!!!1 omg, i dnot even know what to say..its just..WOW...i dont think it needs any work at alll!!!!!!! It really really really moved me....it was such a powerful poem..I LOVED IT..soooo much!!!! and im gonna read it a million times over!!!!! so great job!!!11 like always!!! you rock! :)

lovely. i loved this stance, "The walls I built around my heart
Are crumbling within my soul
And the comforting warmth I had
Is leaving my body numb and cold"
so beautiful, something i can completly relate to. i also loved the lines about the blade, about how it used to bring comfort and is now nothing but pain. so many lovely lines in this poem, a beautiful piece of work (i have no idea why the rating is so low)

This is a great poem, very well written and very deep. keep it up, i will look forward to readin more!