Wow it seems as if i was really there i felt my heart jumb great poem Sent tears down my cheak knowing my brother is at war right now.

This was an amazing poem made me feel like I was there, tears in my eyes can barely write awesome job!

nice...very nice

wow...excellent poem!!! this deserves way more than a five but i'm sorry that's the best i can give ya.

I really liked how you chopped up the poem a bit by separating the stanzas...I think the pausing effect gives it more empathy...cool stuff, great job

wow, you really had me there in the battle x

How depressing.
You've got some talent, kid. This piece proves it.
Never stop in writing, maybe take a career in being a writer.
Take care.

i wanted to cry! nice job!

Wow! That is so emotional and absolutly sad. I very gripping poem, breaking a tear at every eye!
keep writing!
luv kt

wow! Very nice! 5/5...I'm speechless! haha nice work!!

Wow, what a really sad poem. It almost makes you cry. Good work!

wow, that was an amazing poem, although sadly too true now adays, keep writing xxxx

woah i have shivers, thats a very honest acount of a very brave 'barely eighteen' year old soldier.
exelent!!!!!!!!!!!
polly

WOW that is an amazing poem! It's so touching! Especially considering one of my good friends is at war right now. This is one of the best poems I've seen in a while!

-jenn

good portrayal of everyday life over in iraq..keep up the good work.
Five/Five

very sad poem..lots of details and overall great!! keep it up!! :)

Exellent poem with such emotion! Very well written u have a lot of talent! Take Care! Brooke