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The rhyme scheme in this is off...but a very understandable ending. That was a nice way to end it though terribly sorry!
Charisma*

Love it!!!

Dean xoxo

Ouch. I know that pain. This poem was short and sweet, but I am known to give my opinion out loud and proud. And here's my two cents:
It was a really heartfelt right, I mean in a few words you certainly made me remember that feeling. However, the end of it seemed a little forced. I don't know what you could do to fix it, and I hope you don't take it too personally - as a writer should write to keep themselves happy, and nobody else. So don't take this too close to heart. It just seemed a rather forced ending to a great poem.

Love this one too...It really speaks out...Another Fantastic Poem..Joc

Cool, liked it.