by Thumbelina04 Nov 20, 2004
category :
Sadness, depression /
about depression
This is the world of clanging doors |
I like this very much. However the phrase "This is a world of clanging doors" might be better if you didnt sandwich it in between every stanza in both the beginning and the end. It might come across better if you just use it at the end or just use it at the beginning. Poetic license always applys, so only listen if this seems right to you, if not then its still great! :) |