by Ashamed Nov 23, 2004
category :
Love, romance /
desired love
I see her most days |
by Sean Allen
Hey, this poem is pretty good. I think that the rhyme scheme gets a bit too noticeable the closer you get to the end of the poem, and by noticeable I mean a bit unnatural. But I think the message of the poem is one that many can relate to, and despite my previous comment concerning the rhyme scheme, the actual words chosen to rhyme were of high quality. |