You did a great job on the rhyming. It is excellent. Your message is clear to see and understand, but I think there is a hidden message in there. Correct me if I'm wrong.

What I Didnt Like:
1) your poem did not have a real flow. it was choppy sounding.
2) how you transition from line to line is sometimes not too clear; makes your poem sound unorganized

What I Liked:
1) the title fits the poem
2) the rhyming
3) the tone

I gave you a five. Let me know if you did any revisions on this. You are added to my favorites list. (fyi)

Meh, i didnt see anything wrong with it. i can totaly relate. thanx for the comment on mine. ur an awesome writter...keep it up. and i hope that u feel so good one day, u dont have to put on a show..becusae i do the same thing everyday!

thanx guys :D

my god i love it so much! your a great writer, thanx for putting into words what i couldn't figure out for myself. keep it up your fantastic.

This poem is great...its kinda odd you were able to say how much it hurts no more no less..I can relate to this poem alot and gave it a 5..keep up the great work!