An October Stroll

Thank you for that really nice comment you left me! You give me inspiration. I love this poem...everything is so vivid.

"The ones that carpet the dirt road beneath me
And fill the trees that hover over,
That rustles with the harsh wind." this is a fragment of a sentence, and I'm not sure how I'm supposed to read it. Try reading it out loud... it seems awkward. I would probably change it to something like:
"The ones that carpet the dirt road beneath me
fill the trees that hover overhead.
They rustle with the harsh wind."

"As I walk along this moonlit path
Abandoned except for me
The spirits of the dead is in the air
Strolling down this dark damp path
On all hallows eve" the last sentence thingy is a fragment, and sounds sort of weird.. I would recommend making this stanza like this:
"As I walk along this moonlit path,
Abandoned except for me,
The spirits of the dead are in the air.
I stroll down this dark damp path
On All Hallows eve."

good poem

hey good one. keep it up