i completly agree with this.... its like i dont know how to express it.... but you do that for me!

Lovely work.

"they say love
can make you feel like your floating
and heal you when you're hurt
so why am I dying every night?.."

**you're (floating)

And I think it'd sound better if it was: "can make you feel like your floating
and heal you when you're hurting"

Oh, and maybe...instead of "so why am I dying every night?" - it could be "so why is it that every night I am dying?" ...to keep the "ing" but that would change another pattern you have...well only a suggestion. It's a great poem...sincere...set up nicely.

Thanks for the comment :) Well I'm glad my poems weren't the thing to put you asleep! Sleep...I remember that...vaguely...

Hah...thanks for the compliments. :)

xxx