I like this one too. This form of poetry isnt too popular normally, because it doesnt fit what a poem is "supposed" to be in many ways. They make you think and they dont flow, the choppyness makes it harder to percieve. I love them though, I appreciate them very much. You should check out my poem "beautiful girl," you could probably relate to it. It hasnt scored too well because people like the rhyme-y-flow-y ones better, lol. Anyway I LOVE it.
With love, K. Kristina