its awesome. keep writing!!

that was good,very discriptive,good though,keep writing :)

hello i think your poem was awesome very real exaclly how my first was and i thought he was the one too and now well he left me after a year and 5 months but i tell you this i havent done anyone else sience

I understand what you guys are saying, that it is very descriptive, but also keep in mind that it is in the EXPLICIT section for a reason. If people can do it, people can talk about it. I dont really see what the big deal is anyway, for instance a di ck is a body part, like an arm or something. lol. Sorry, dont mean to offend anyone. Thanks for your opinion. I love it when people comment, good or bad, it makes me a better writer. Thanks guys!

OMG that poem was an instant turn on you keep wrighting like that an you'll end up doing poems for Play boy or Penthouse or something, right on keeo wrighting

hey i really liked this one. it doesnt exactly fit my first time since i was raped 3 times but it was still good. thanks for sharing it with us.
~Kay~

love it

another great poem.

alwayz,
*hellz angel*

nice poem!! keep it up!! :)

Explicit? Yes. But you what stands out above everything else in this poem? There's a moment of perfection in here:

So perfect, dread day.

For all of the description this one line describes everything and more.

Brilliant.

Bert

Great Work, descriptive is always the key, it allows other to experience the moment. Read mine if you get a chance!

Wow! Its wonderful!

that was really good. Great job hun. >3jess

i wish my first time was as good as you made that poem teh kid sucked he didnt even get me wet or give me an orgasim keep up the good work

yea i wish i saved ma virginity fo tha right guy but noooooooooo i had to loose it to an a $$.... which i def regret now... but it was good

that was an awesome poem... ma 1st hasnt gotten here yet, hope its that perfect

omg! I loveeeedd it! this is the BEST poem i've read on here yet! keep it up !! 5/5 ...}{illary!

That I waited for someone who loved me for sure,
Instead of letting someone take me, then walk out the door.

wow. a brilliant ending!

Lv A, x

Hot poem!! If that was about your real first time, that's great!! I'm glad it was so good! :D Well written though!!! Great job!
~BJ~

I liked, sizzling!