Hey,
your poem is ok. But it would be better if it had a little more discription of your feelings. Although I thought it was overall good, exept the lastline because you used the same word to try and ryme. Sorry if I sounded a bit harsh I just though you'd want some constructive critisism. You can check out mine and give me all the mean and harsh critisism you want if you like...The poems name is *Marcus* (after my boyfriend...Although since then he has asked me to marry him, but it still fits well.