Dude, you gotta do this for . Use 'less instead of "unless"
That would be hotness.

Cheerio
Aken Sol

Leave it the way it is Jeffrey. I love it. :D *grins*

nice one! i like the emotion showed, great poem!

I really liked the "My sole divine" part, because of the sole/soul thing going on, very high-class. i would say that the line that bothered me the most was "Unless I was your doll," there are a lot of words that rhyme with fall: all, ball, brawl, thrall, enthral, recall, squall, hall, scrawl, wall, tall... you get the idea. Good poem

great poem rachel is one lucky girl to have some one like you and keep up the good work

5/5 terry vaughan

Awww that is so sweet really great poem