The thought was there, and you had potential for a good poem, but in my opinion, it didn't quite flow. Poems don't have to rhyme, and it seemed a little forced. I have read all your poetry and I DEFINATELY think you have potential. Take care and keep writing. I look forward to reading more.

Nice poem, I like the theme.

I loved this one! Definetly my favorite by you! I loved the ending line:

"They took the place inside my mind
I lost that place I once called mine"

Beauttttiifffullll <333 xxxx Total art my friend...keep writing please xxx

-Mortalidaga
xxTakeCarexx

Bte, you are on my favorites now <3 xxx

-Mort
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