so sad! very well written & meaningful... 5/5

Such a sad poem but really great, keep up the good work and i hope your friend is arlight

realy great poem hope your freidns ok you r a great writer keep at it bye
~kathleeny~

A cry that reaches. I would love to save the world from this wretchedness, and now I'm reminded. Very emtional. Thanks for sharing.

Excellent poem, take care and keep writing

great poem, very sad. man... that hits home in a way...

Different style to anything I've ever read. Not sure whether that's good or bad, but very detailed and made it very easy to empathise. Well done.

You've done an admirable job in describing a sad situation with a very meaningful poem.

This poem was soooooooo sad, you wrote it very well, and it had alot of emotion within it, i was almost in tears.
deserves nothing less then a 5
take care
Scooby

Hey- thanks so much guys! Yeh- i hope she's alright too! I haven't seen her in like 2/3 years so thats really upsetting.

awww, thats sad! I am sorry for what happened! This is a fantastic peice of work! Very emotional, and it touches my heart! *tears* keep it up!
-Shana

"She'd bring out her weapon
Of whatever she found
Slicing the red
Screaming without sound"

I really admire that stance. Your words were tragic and powerful, and I also liked the second line,"
Cried her mother with eyes held in black"

symbolic imagery, good job