Sanity's departure

by silent submission   Dec 4, 2004


Take my hand
and feel my pain
listen to my heart
and hear the rain

you wont stop it now
i love you but dont try
in the letter i leave you
it will tell you why

for now you can't know
as i have lied again
and in death i can fix it
in death i'll be free my friend

i just wish to say
as my final farewell
don't take life for granted
it will soon become hell

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  • 19 years ago

    by silent submission

    hehe dats ok, im not extactic with the ending as it is.....

  • 19 years ago

    by Knight_of_Blackrose

    I retract my previous suggestion on the last line, my dumb ass skipped a line.... sorry bout that

  • 19 years ago

    by silent submission

    yeh thanks for that, im still thining but wanted to post it anyway...i really apreciate your votes and comments, champion :)

  • 19 years ago

    by Knight_of_Blackrose

    Alot of power, packed into a "to the point" poem... my only suggestion is mabey think of changing the last line to something that flows alittle better.... Awesome poem

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