Very original writing and story. I like it!
5/5
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Thanks for the kind words, and the motivation ;)

wow, breath taking. i love this piece, you have a talent with words and they bring much emotion into your work,

"My beggars for this mystery...this husk of a once identity advanced in a cursed evolution as history deemed unfound? "

I love that stance. The words and comparisons you use are powerful and the symbols are intense. fantastic job

I am honored that you enjoyed it so much. Now then, you've given me another name to inspire me. I look forward to reading your work ;)

Another intriguing tale. I have to ask, though...

In the following line, did you mean "borrowed lives" or what you had:

"Can I help for my score of barrowed lives to come this far?"

At first I thought it was a spelling error, and then I realized that "barrowed lives" was an interesting description, especially for one dwelling in barrows, or simply underground away from the light (continuing on a vampiric theme prevalent in much of your poetry). So now I'd love to know what you intended.... ;)

Barrowed lives: after all the people who let him into their society, and or touched him in some way. How he couldn't explain or make them understand why he never seemed to age, while they had to witness there own through his eyes.

And yes...it was a spelling error. But thank you for taking the initiative to make sense of it. THat tells me a lot :?

wow that is really good!!! it really seems you wrote that with your heart once again great job!!

emmerz