I really like this poem it's very unique.

WOW, this definately wasn't funny...lol. I really liked this one, you are a REALLY great writter i have not one suggestion for you because it flowed PERFECTLY!!!! again 5/5
take care
Scooby

thanx everyone It makes me feel really great to hear you guys say that... Im gonna tell my friend as well becuase he helped me finish it.. thanx for your input.. I will hopefully creat a new one soon. take care everyone and keep writing!

Cool...and the ending is the best...your fried is good...