wow, this is an incredibly piece of dark poetry. I have no idea why the rating is so low. you painted a mystifying and lusty piscture in the beginning, and as the piece went on the darkness increased. Your word choice is a powerful tool in this poem and sets a dark scenery blended with terrible and beautiful imagery.
His lips expand and follow his warm breath to her neck,
shaking uncontrollably as his tongue lacerates her flesh,
her mind is racing, she is a nervous wreck."

i really admired that stance. Darkly beautiful and written with pure talent. great job

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Thank you so much, comments like that are what keep me writing. It means ALOT.

this is sooo good.... and getting me to say that is like asking me to chop off my head...in other words not very easy.... please write more

nice, thats so creative and talent driven, i've never read anything by you before, but i'm lettin you know i will now, this poem was great...Lee nicole

lol...thanx everyone.