Comments : Couldn't help

  • 19 years ago

    by BrokenMisery

    wow, short but intensly powerful. Experiment with your rhyming a little, if it just feels like the words were there and somehow it just ended up rhyming,it seems to flow easier, thats why i feel patterns can be harsh..

    anys, after all me yabbering, i think it is a great poem and keep writing, you truly have a gift! 5/5
    luv ya
    kt