A letter to a Friend

by ariyanna   Dec 13, 2004


You know i really have to be a fool,
to think that i could ever get with you,

to think that i would really be your type,
i don't know what was running through my mind.

I'm really feeling all the things you do,
i fall in love with you just being you

but nothing in this world can make me believe,
for one second that you're feeling me.

you know I'd really like to have the chance,
to be your girl and you be my man

but the choice is really up to you,
and i know that me you wouldn't choose

you might say i have low self-esteem
because i really don't think much of me.

but I'm only speaking honestly,
i know your type and it isn't me.

so i know i have to play pretend
another smile, another lie, love always
YOUR FRIEND

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  • 19 years ago

    by Fluffy Cotton

    Your poem was very nice. it was nearly perfect. it displayed a wonderful amount of emotion and the form was nearly perfect. i loved how the syllables matched up so nicely. a few tips for only like 3 of your 2 line stanzas.

    in the stanza : but nothing in this world can make me believe,
    for one second that you're feeling me.
    instead of you're you can put you are and the syllables will match perfectly.

    also, in the stanza : you know I'd really like to have the chance,
    to be your girl and you be my man
    instead of you be my man you can put you to be my man and it'll fit.
    other than those two little incy wincy tincy things, it was magnificent. you're a wonderful writer. keep it up ^-^

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