The poem was pretty good, but it drives me CRAZY when people use '1' instead of 'one' or 'wit' instead of 'with'. I despise internet slang, and if the poem had been any longer, i probably would have given up on it. So my advice: type with correct spelling and punctuation, you'll get more readers that way, and it makes you look more sophisticated, even at the age of 12, like you.

My two cents. Good poem though.
,,Ashes..

This is cute. Ireally like it. This is how i feel about my boo. lol I like your love poems. Maybe you should think about writeing more.

Awwwwww so cute love it !~~~~~~~

hey could u check out my poems it will menat alot!!!!!