Lucidity

Hmm, I definetely did like it- I liked your last stanza the best, I think it provided better flow than the rest. But definetely it is a very unique piece of work. Well done.

Amazing writting..I enjoy reading your poetry..its unique..Luved this..keep on writting okay
Shannon

I think your partner and you are onto something. I can see where others might not track what you are suggesting, but that's a lapse in experience, not your writing.

hey thanks for your comment and i will do what you said and ill rewrite it too
and hopfully it will work and sorry for that rude comment i will read your poems and give you a good comment(if its a good poem)

THANKS LOVE STACY!

YOUR MEAN ON WRITING COMMENTS LIKE THAT HIS POEMS HIS POEMS ARE GREAT YOUR JUST HATING YOUR POEMS ARNT THAT GOOD ITHER IF YOU DONT HAVE ANYTHING NICE TO SAY DONT SAY SHIT!!!!!!!!