WOW...ness this poem is friken awesome -fied *stands up and applauds* WAHOOO *rates 5 *

agreed with the one above...

The poem is alltogether good, and the ending part is great, yet some of the rhyming seemed way to forced for my liking.

You should consider revising it..

But still, the story is good...

keep it up

I agree with the person above. But overall i'd say this was a great poem.

agreed with the one above...

The poem is alltogether good, and the ending part is great, yet some of the rhyming seemed way to forced for my liking.

You should consider revising it..

But still, the story is good...

keep it up

Great poem!! I loved it, 5/5

The poem was good overall, but I have one suggestion. Change "Now I have a new fight to fight" to, "Now I have a new battle to fight." It would fit in better, but anyway, good job.

-Ice

good poem

good job but I agree with some of the suggestions of how to revise it. However, overall this is a good poem.

Over all, I think you did a pretty good job on this poem, but I thought that the topic is too worn out.

Some rhymes really did seem forced, but I didn't see a big problem with that.

I really liked the lines:

Sometimes you have to give up your own foolish pride
To be a hero inside

Good job, keep writing, nice write.
Dorotea

Beautiful poem. I love it. I gave it a five. Keep it up.

Love much,
Tiff

this was a good poem the lines like others said need to be leghtened....but all in all it was a good poem and emotional....x)

that was really good. i liked the rhyming and the use of odd words. it was a little confusing...is it true? why can you reveal how you feel? well the poem rocks and please keep writing

dawn

I like the idea of using the title in the end, makes it powerful and emotional.Ireally liked your poem,it confused me a bit, but it was nice!

sounds like something Peter Parker would say to M.J. in the next spiderman film. Intresting that was a good read keep up the work...