You can write! I’d like see more of your work.
J-Lee

aww thats sad, did this really happen, your a good writer keep it up

i think this is a good poem, but i think, do you like critisism? if you dont just tell me...but it seemed like in this poem you put a lot of focus in trying to rhym, rather then trying to express your true thought...rhyming should be your last worry, just think about words that will enhance your thoughts and make it like it was straight from your heart and soul, where it all started, good job other wise...Lee

i think this is a good poem, but i think, do you like critisism? if you dont just tell me...but it seemed like in this poem you put a lot of focus in trying to rhym, rather then trying to express your true thought...rhyming should be your last worry, just think about words that will enhance your thoughts and make it like it was straight from your heart and soul, where it all started, good job other wise...Lee