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by Tayla   Dec 25, 2004


My life is pal and blue,
I don't have a clue,
Where I'm at,
There's a dead black cat,

I sink in sorrow,
but my life is over
tomorrow,

So what do i have,
To live for now,
I must die,
But i must try,

To live a life,
that i don't have,
but want to.

~*I'm sorry that i suck a poetry i wish i could be a better writer*~

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  • 19 years ago

    by BrokenMisery

    oh and have yourself a merry christmas and a happy new year! :D

  • 19 years ago

    by BrokenMisery

    Not bad for a first try! Keep it up! I have written about 40 or 50 poems since august (most not on this account) anys- i got a few points to help ya out chicka!
    1. whe you are decribing something, and youd describe it as a sentence, then make it a sentence long.
    2. experiment a little, try things out, there are so many ways to ryhme lol
    3. Add metaphors to describe something- for example, crimson tears- as cutting. It makes it more interesting and original
    4. read a bit, i have read a lot of poetry and its helped me to improve
    5. enjoy yourself, get yourself emotionally envolved in wot your writing. it makes it more meaningful, not just to those who are reading it, but you as well!

    Good luk- and im still improving- (mine isnt very good)
    but keep it up and soon ull b writing better than me, even though that certainly isnt hard lol :)
    luv ya!
    Good luk!
    4/5

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