this is really very good, Kharisma... and I did give it a 5...becasue it wasn't lacking enough to be a 4... but if this were a 10 point scale, I may have dropped it to a 8 simply because....

it has the potential to be so much more... and I know you have the talent to do it... it will be a good writing exercise even if you never post it...

Just separate all the stanzas to the first two lines of each start with "Hear" "Look" or "Listen" and the next two lines of each stanza refer to the first two but don't start with those key words. You could have 2 stanzas for each... and the order could be "Hear, Look, Listen, Hear, Look, listen" or "Hear, Hear" Look, Look, Listen Listen" Have fun with it!

5/5 very good poem stuck with the title, your a great writter hope to read more from you soon....