Cant you

by ♥kHarIsMa♥   Dec 26, 2004


Cant you hear my cries
cant you feel my pain
look into my eyes
i think I'm going insane

cant you hear my heart
cant you feel my chills
iv loved you from the start
but your love just kills

cant you feel me shaking
cant you feel my hurt
my heart its just breaking
like a tearing shirt

cant you see me crying
wishing i just had you
cant you see me dying
slowly wanting you....

please rate and comment...i know its kinda gay..but id appreciate it if you'd comment...ill greatly return the favor...
thank you!

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  • 18 years ago

    by Emma

    No way, its not kinda gay. at all!!! i love it. its so sad and i know how you feel. this is amazing work : ) keep your head up!!

  • 19 years ago

    by Pocket

    aww! really good poem- keep up tha work! you are truly gifted! if you could get tha chance try and read some of mine~! thanx!
    much <3, pocket~

  • 19 years ago

    by ♥kHarIsMa♥

    Thanx for all the comments they all mean so much to me....

  • 19 years ago

    by PnQ Mod Account

    Yes!!! I can hear, feel, see it all! You've painted a very good picture with your words.

    In the last line, I might consider changing "slowing" to "only" or "always"

  • 19 years ago

    by GirlieLovexx

    awww if only ppl we love could see what they do, oh well keep them coming!

    abby xxxx

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