i like ur poem only thing is the last line in the middle bit was a bit long. otherwise it was great!
*incognito*

I agree with Incognito, that last line in the middle stanza could use a little bit of reworking, but the rest of your wonderful poem was golden. I could really feel the helplessness as I was reading it, your poem was so dark and captivating. Hang in there.
lots of love,
~Krystle~ XX