nice ideas i like them but i think u can work on this one and make it better than it is but it is good work i like it

another interesting poem, the topic is well chosen, again, the rhyming is throwing me off a bit, but its still really well done,
4/5
keep going!neva give up!
luv kt

This poem could do with a little work on it, but the ideas are brill!

Keep writing.

Nici.