Broken By You

by Robert   Dec 31, 2004


You beat me to a point where I could not return,
for a secret you were hell bent to learn.
You held me down and tortured my body until I screamed in pain,
hoping that my resistance to you would be in vane.
You made me watch all I held so dear die by your hand,
and still my silence took a stand.
The blood and pain you said would stop, if I would only tell,
you said you would lead me from this hell.
I believed you once and you lied to me like it was nothing,
so now I hesitate anything you bring.
Peeling back my son’s skin and hearing him cry out,
you took to killing when you saw my actions remain stout.
I lay here on the table turning from side to side to look at the dead,
and I lay here kept alive by the secrets I have not said.
Some may say it’s a matter of time, before my life will end,
but know this, I will not tell you my friend.
Weather it be a gun, a knife, or even electricity that you shall use,
in the end, I will not loose.
I am broken by body and heart, but never mind,
I will die and my memory you can never rewind.
What have you given me to give my secrets away,
I hope I shall die before I speak this I pray.
No, I speak what secret I know is true,
my God, I know I am broken because of you.

Written By
Robert Lee Niswander
Copyright 2004

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  • 16 years ago

    by a broken smile with a broken heart is a poets life

    Very dark poem. the imagery you used was great. in places the poem was a little shaky, but you managed to cover that with your talented rhyming.

    You made me watch all I held so dear die by your hand,
    and still my silence took a stand.

    However, i don't think this line should be there at all it just disturbs the flow of your poem.

    other than that the poem was great

    "Peeling back my son’s skin and hearing him cry out,
    you took to killing when you saw my actions remain stout."

    this is my favorite part of your poem. The words you used where able to paint a picture of pure horror in my mind. a poem or a line that can do that just means that its simply Flawless art.

    **Ada**
    *aBSwaBHiaPL*

  • 17 years ago

    by Romancing the Darker Side

    A few pieces of advice: Break your poems down into stanzas, it would make it a lot easier to read. Try fixing up your flow a little, if a line doesn't sound great then take out or add in a few words. Good stuff: I felt like this poem had a good, solid story-of-sorts to it, and it was very deep in imagery. Good job.

  • 17 years ago

    by amoxi

    Wow this was a sad poem, i liked sad poems the most and i have to say this one was very good, it had a very good ending im impressed keep it up

  • 17 years ago

    by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

    Wow.
    Powerful ending; I really like it.
    Hm.
    The flow was very nice, the wording perfect...all around, it was excellent. Nice job.

    xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 5.5

  • 17 years ago

    by xxxStarSxxx

    Omigosh! This is so sad, and depressing. But thats doesn't mean it's not good, cuz it is! The flow of it was pretty consistant, but it occasionallly got off. other than that I loved it! 5/5
    ~Steff

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