Oh my gosh. That was so sad..........so dark. None the less, I enjoyed reading it!!!!! 5/5

Quite amazing, well written, deep emtion, wonderful word choice. 5/5

Very deep, powerful, wonderful word choice, great word choice, and from the poems I've read along with this one, you had to have been in the Army! Well I loved the poem, I feel sorry for you if this is something that happened to you,,,,amazing poem.... 5/5

The rhyming was pretty good
The rhythm got a little off once or twice
I think that the idea/message was good
It didnt sound cliche
which is hard to do with a love poem
great job
5/5

Omigosh! This is so sad, and depressing. But thats doesn't mean it's not good, cuz it is! The flow of it was pretty consistant, but it occasionallly got off. other than that I loved it! 5/5
~Steff

Wow.
Powerful ending; I really like it.
Hm.
The flow was very nice, the wording perfect...all around, it was excellent. Nice job.

xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 5.5

Wow this was a sad poem, i liked sad poems the most and i have to say this one was very good, it had a very good ending im impressed keep it up

A few pieces of advice: Break your poems down into stanzas, it would make it a lot easier to read. Try fixing up your flow a little, if a line doesn't sound great then take out or add in a few words. Good stuff: I felt like this poem had a good, solid story-of-sorts to it, and it was very deep in imagery. Good job.

Very dark poem. the imagery you used was great. in places the poem was a little shaky, but you managed to cover that with your talented rhyming.

You made me watch all I held so dear die by your hand,
and still my silence took a stand.

However, i don't think this line should be there at all it just disturbs the flow of your poem.

other than that the poem was great

"Peeling back my son’s skin and hearing him cry out,
you took to killing when you saw my actions remain stout."

this is my favorite part of your poem. The words you used where able to paint a picture of pure horror in my mind. a poem or a line that can do that just means that its simply Flawless art.

**Ada**
*aBSwaBHiaPL*