i agree with Sam,I think you captured the moment and it IS a beautiful poem..

It's go0d.

;;^^Kalah

thats really beautiful

WOW I'm sorry...That was really good 5/5! That gave me goosebumps! GOOD JOB!

That's so sad! Sorry to hear about your loss. You did a great job writing on how your father feels. I couldn't imagine the pain of the loss of a child! Take Care! Brooke

thank you guys for reading my poem i enjoyed your comments and i thank you for giving them to me

candi

That is extremely sad. Oh my, I really felt the emotion in thie poem, it was well done. 5/5

Kalika

thank you for your comment i greatly appreciate it.

That was incredible. Im so sorry your sis died
Luv Scarlet xxxx

I am so sorry that you and your family had to go theough that. your poem was a mazing and your right that she's wacthing you. all of you . 5.5

Wonderful girl. Only the last line of the first stanza was too long, but apart from that, simply fantastic. You really did capture the emotion, and feelings of the poem. You are incredibly talented. I hope this loss has not damaged your beautiful soul.

Thank you for your comments i greatly appreciate them. my sister died over 18 years ago i never got to know her cause she was born before i was and died before i was born. but it is still hard knowing that i have a sister that doesn't exist

This is beautiful and i am really sorry about your sister

I'm sorry about your sister.

That was a beauiful poem though. :)

Great poem good flow and touching topic thank you for shareing it

Again, beautiful poem, i really liked it !!

XxX Cici XxX

Aww.. that was so deep and touching.. i lykd the sensitivity in ur poem.. im so sorry about ur sister, i hope u dont hurt too much.. im here if u ever need anything.. that piece was amazing
keep it up
take care

I didnt quite understand this one but i can tell it was really well written and the fact that its dedicated to such a thing is really sweet yet sad...5/5

Beautiful...very touching, like silent tears.

Wow, this is amazing. It's always especially tragic when the natural order is disrupted. Great job.