Random, but not bad.

Very interesting, never heard a poem like it. 5/5

wow, that was an amazing piece, short but really well written, the ending is nicely done and good wording too, keep it up x x

very deep, a bit short, but deep. Great work ! Take care,
E.

Excellent rhythm to this piece, I quite enjoyed your portrayal of a lifetime in the matter of insignificant seconds. Sad to say, but it made me think.

(I say 'sad to say' because I always find it incredibly depressing when you have to point out that you're genuinely thinking. It's like I spend most of the time not thinking.)

Also, the break from the rhyming pattern at the end worked well, probably because of the spacing.

Thoughtful stuff.

-paperdoll

Wonderful.. short but sweet lines that are straight to the point I liked it.. and thanx for your comment on my poem.. I really appreciate it (however im not really a parent I just wrote about one)

LOVED it! Amazing flow and rhythm, and such a unique approach to the topic. I thought the length was good, it is short but very effective. Take care
- Polly x

That was a very interesting poem but it was very good !!!!! xoxoo linda xoxoxo

Wow! that was amazing...for being short it had tons of power throughout the whole thing...it was brialliant, unigue and wonderful!! 5/5

Short and sweet! you could read it so fast that it actually seemed like a flash. nice talent. keep it up!

This is different... but really good.

I really like this poem, it's just how things in life go so fast that it's hard to tell what exactly happened at first. your poem showed that beautifull, even though i knew what happened. but i loved the flow and speed this poem actually went at.

thanks for the comment as well, i've been working on that line that you mentioned.

~Jacklyn