Someone special i treasure

by Nathan   Jan 3, 2005


I look into you eyes, blinded by the light

I cant look away, i struggle every time... i fight

It draws me in, the beauty that is awake

Just give me a chance i wont make a mistake

Golden sun reassembles your hair

I cant help it but just stand and stare

I smile i laugh and sometimes cry

Id do anything for you, even die

I'm nothing more than a passenger in this crush

You probably think this is all just mush

Huggles you hold me tight

You are Divine beauty, my inner light.

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  • 19 years ago

    by Nathan

    why thank you ashley, yeah i feel as this is my best poem ive wrote perhaps its because i like the gal i wrote it about eeek *hides*

  • 19 years ago

    by PnQ Mod Account

    Yes, Nathan...very good indeed...

    I agree with Sarah... you need to
    **get those apostrophes in there (can't, can't, won't, I'd)
    **capitalize the i's that refer to yourself (since you did some, you should do all. I have seen poems where it seemed appropriate to use the lower case i's...)

    **also, I think instead of "reassembles", you meant "resembles"...

    Those are the basics... if you want more help, let me know!

    This really is a great poem... you show a lot of talent.

    ~Ann

  • 19 years ago

    by Nathan

    WOW im sooo shocked at the responses......*blush* aww thanks you peeps so much you lot have encouraged me to write more poetry thaaank youuuu

    Nathan.

  • 19 years ago

    by Natalie84

    Great poem! I enjoyed it.....Keep it up and keep 'em coming!!

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