Great poem! I enjoyed it.....Keep it up and keep 'em coming!!

WOW im sooo shocked at the responses......*blush* aww thanks you peeps so much you lot have encouraged me to write more poetry thaaank youuuu

Nathan.

Yes, Nathan...very good indeed...

I agree with Sarah... you need to
**get those apostrophes in there (can't, can't, won't, I'd)
**capitalize the i's that refer to yourself (since you did some, you should do all. I have seen poems where it seemed appropriate to use the lower case i's...)

**also, I think instead of "reassembles", you meant "resembles"...

Those are the basics... if you want more help, let me know!

This really is a great poem... you show a lot of talent.

~Ann

why thank you ashley, yeah i feel as this is my best poem ive wrote perhaps its because i like the gal i wrote it about eeek *hides*