Cobras(Tanka)

by Lance Hardy   Jan 4, 2005


Venomous cobras
Seek nothing but food to live
Swallow tiny mice

Survival of the fittest
How can the purest live on?
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In response to Aken Sol's tanka, "Gems." My first tanka, please give feedback.

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  • 19 years ago

    by Sean Allen

    by the way my response is up :-)

  • 19 years ago

    by Sean Allen

    Its good. I would try to avoid using "the," but if you have to, do it. I liked this one; it didn't contradict or confront Aken's, but it did bring up an interesting point about survival.

  • 19 years ago

    by Aken Sol

    Nice. Very nice. So you're saying that everyone has to abe a little evil to survive? well, evil's the wrong word... but a darke side. Like the ying and Yang theory. Niiiice.

    Aken Sol

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