Oasis (Tanka)

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Beautiful. I love the symbolism portrayed in such a naturaly beautiful way and how it was related to objects of nature. I especially admired the last two lines, it really adds a lovley glimmer of hope and inspiration to the piece, good job

I enjoyed this one, though I found the "ebbing quietly" to seem at odds with the culminating point. Ebbing quietly would be more similar to dying in silence, than surviving secretly.

Response to "Diamond in the Rough" by Aken Sol.