by Erica Brown© Jan 5, 2005
category :
Sadness, depression /
about death
He wanted to be the best, |
i really liked this poem |
It's go0d, i like the ideas behind the poem. Very meaningful. |
Bit confused as to whether or not I like this poem to be honest. I love the idea, but the irregularity of your lines is a bit off-putting. Try balancing them out to get the best out of your idea. Very well done though, love the idea! |
by SCARECROW
Pretty great. You pen some neat lines. |