Pretty great. You pen some neat lines.

Bit confused as to whether or not I like this poem to be honest. I love the idea, but the irregularity of your lines is a bit off-putting. Try balancing them out to get the best out of your idea. Very well done though, love the idea!

It's go0d, i like the ideas behind the poem. Very meaningful.
Take care always,

;;^^Kalah

i really liked this poem
good on u
luv ya xoxox