Hmm.. I feel as if there is something missing in this poem. A key thing but I can't grasp what. I don't know maybe you'll see it too. Good work though on everything else.

WOW ..First I would like to say Congrats on coming to God hun...I also am Like you I am a believer and have wrote a few poems like this myself..God loves everyone no matter if they sin or not...That's why he died for us and it just shocked me when you said I can't believe God loves me..I am so grateful another person has went to Jesus in this world! I just love seeing that!! NOw its people like you and me have to spread the word that God is real and is coming back!
I do agree with you something is missing but I can't put my finger on it either...I hope you find it sorry I'm no help...AMAZING JOB!
Kind Regards,
~Chelsey~