its amazing lu and i aint just saying this u have progressed so much, it is fkn amazin!!! i really liked this part:
the circle keeps turning as normal
at the top, a short phase of good

:D well dun gurl. always ere,
take care,
ellie
but from then on its down hill and struggle
in my cold heart rotting like wood

this was great. I really liked it. I gave it a 5! another masterpiece!!

this is a brilliant poem no suggestions needed it was really great i hope you find your answers some where i no the fustration the questions can bear and thanks for your comment much appreciated they always are x