wOw..It just blew me away. Especially to be your first poem...amazing! The line that says:
"A soul nearly broken
In darkness, unhealing
A heart almost frozen
In darkness unfeeling"
is my favorite..its very descriptive and emotional...loved it!
-xoxo-
Lauren

i dont think it was bad..i thought it was really good...good job

thank you both of you

lol yay thank you i wrote it a long time ago but thank you :)

awesome poem

congrats! u just made my favorits list! i love it! keep it up! xoxo LeXi ( oh, and if u get a chance it would b awesome if u could read and comment on some of my poems. thnx! )

boi dats GOOD!!!!
write more.... and thanx 4 commentin me.

Yeah it was my birthday man i gotta start writing again havent been on this site in forever its been a while since ive written anything i doubt ill ever live up to this poem again though none of my other ones are this good :\

Very Good, I enjoyed reading this...very deep also.

For one of your first poems I'd say this is absolutely stunning. It had a very great flow. I read through it so quick I didn't realize it ended! lol. The word choice was very good... And the concept was amazing. Your opening stanza was the best part of this poem, although the whole thing was beautifully written, the opening caught me and dragged me in. Exactly what the first stanza of ANY poem should do. Very great write! 5/5