Jesus man, and i do mean Jesus. :-)

Nice write/

Aken Sol

With every step the platform rises and falls
and with every step their chests rise and fall
and with every step the crowd sucks in its collective breath.
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That's the only part I didn't really liked. It was alright that you wrote.. "With every step" But you said 'Falls' and then 'Fall' right after each other. Otherthan that though, I thought it was pretty good. 5/5

`Taleee. xx.