All but ambitionless

by Sinister Soire   Jan 8, 2005


In this world of loveliness
I have been forsaken by your lord
Left out in the snow and rain
And omitted from your bliss

You make everything so good
Yet I am punished just the same
By this love you tempt me with
If I could be with you I would

But I am left out in the cold
And an all to bitter world
Left outside in freezing rain
But for you my love I will be bold

I would trudge through miles alone
To encounter you in time
Eventually I will succeed
And arrive at the door step of your home

Unfortunately that cannot be done
For oceans do separate
My love from gaining you
Though I would gladly move the sun

These feats are hardly impossible
And someday I will succeed
To gain your hand in mine
And all which I am able

I remain all but ambitionless
For I aim to meet my love
You are my rising sun
In this world of loveliness

copyright 2005 © Logan Brown

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  • 19 years ago

    by Not Bulletproof

    Killer, you're very considered to give suggestions, but really, if it is from his heart, and it could be kept that way, then really, shouldn't he be able to leave it like that? It's an amazing poem, without your suggestions. I know you try to help but you seem very rude in my opinion. It's not really how it is written, and what grammar is right or wrong, it gets the point across, is very sweet, and from his heart, shouldn't that be all that matters?

    -Mortalidaga
    xxTakeCarexx

    Love u Logan.

  • 19 years ago

    by Sinister Soire

    i like your suggestions and i am greatful for them, though for many of your suggestions on this poem i works either way, and i had actually considered using some of them before but i chose the ones i did over then. though i never though of "me from attaining you an i will consider changing that one" thank you for the constructive critizim

  • 19 years ago

    by Not Bulletproof

    Great write hun...so beautiful...just enchanting, i loved it hun...amazing job..love u...xxxxxx <3 xxxxxxx

    -Mortalidaga
    xxTakeCarexx

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