by Driven Soul Jan 10, 2005
category :
Love, romance /
first love
My first love was cute, and Dabid was his name |
yo check it out you don't need improvement on this one cause it came straight from emotions and your heart it's nice, i feel bad about what happened to him i wish that death never existed!!! Peace Out!!!!!! |
I love this one more! By reading it you can feel your emotions and the joy he brought to your life. It was very well written. One thing I would try and do though, is take some of your everyday commonly used words and find other ones that mean the same thing. Just a suggestion... even if not I still like it the way it is! Angabima..Angelinis.. whatever that girls name is... She is getting on my last one, so I may be changing my account. Then I wont have to worry about people coming and voting me low out of hate! But I will private message you and let you know. Keep writing girl! |