I love this one more! By reading it you can feel your emotions and the joy he brought to your life. It was very well written. One thing I would try and do though, is take some of your everyday commonly used words and find other ones that mean the same thing. Just a suggestion... even if not I still like it the way it is! Angabima..Angelinis.. whatever that girls name is... She is getting on my last one, so I may be changing my account. Then I wont have to worry about people coming and voting me low out of hate! But I will private message you and let you know. Keep writing girl!

yo check it out you don't need improvement on this one cause it came straight from emotions and your heart it's nice, i feel bad about what happened to him i wish that death never existed!!! Peace Out!!!!!!